Tuesday, 10 March 2015

Quick write

Quick write
In the light,black pollution takes over with a mist of black clouds and from day it becomes night.Sirens go all night with people afraid.Beaming lights become dark noisy rooms become silent.Big planes come up from the sky with beaming lights flashing light while droping bombs every where.


my goal is to.............

introduce the topic like intro,middle and end

4 comments:

  1. Good writing Rhea but you could use a little more of Descriptive language

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  2. Good writing Rhea but you could use a little more of Descriptive language

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  3. Good structure, try to use a range of words and not repeat adjectives and verbs more than once in a small piece of writing like this.

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  4. thank u miss t and michael

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